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Some people believe that teenagers should concentrate on all school subjects. But other believes that teenagers should focus on the subject that they are good at or that they find the more interest. Discuss both sides and give your opinion?

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Nowadays, education is a key to success but sometimes it becomes very difficult to choose the subjects.Some groups of society opine that students should focus on every single
subject
 while others hold different views. I personally believe that teens should pay attention to the main
subject
 in which they have an interest.I will shed a light on both opinions in the upcoming,paragraphs. On the
one
 hand, if a student gets a good command in each
subject
then
 they have more job opportunities than others.
For example
, in any sort of interview employer ask the question regarding all course
therefore
, knowledge of each
subject
 can be a boon for us.
On the other hand
,if students give preference to their interested subjects
then
 they can score above the average because they want to learn about the topic not just to get passing marks.
For example
, if a student has any problem in biology maybe he/she can do best in chemistry. To add to it,
instead
 of getting deep down in each ,
subject
 it has become very easy to pick
one
 main course and give hundred per cent to achieve the goals because at the end of school we just need to decide which stream is best and which can help us to get more job offers. To sum up, focusing on
one
 course is useful than
distracted
Add a missing verb
being distracted
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 by other
subjectssubject
Correct your spelling
subjects subject
.
For example
, after secondary ,school just
one
subject
 will decide the future for us .Learning about all courses are always better but choosing the important
one
 will always be best.
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