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Some people prefer to stay in the same job for same company, but other prefer to change job frequently. You should use specific reason to compare the advantages and disadvantages of both sides.

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In modern society, some
people
 often diverse their
job
 due to reference, boredom, hobbies, motivation, etc. But there are
also
people
 that like to work in the same
company
 for the long run. Both of them have favourable advantages and disadvantages. The advantage of staying in the same
company
 is that you will be able to gain lots of
experience
 for that
one
 particular
job
 and be able to perform very well. It
also
 helps you keep a better relationship with the co-worker and some situations, your customer. Being in that same
company
 might gain you the trust of the boss which might get you a better
job
 position and salary raise. It
also
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 easier because working in
one
 place only
one
 set of skills that you will have. For
people
 that often change
job
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, it will vary your overall life
experience
 more because you will be working in places with different skill requirements, frequently changing your work environment would increase your morale because your work will be different every time you allocate and not be as boring as working in
one
 place only and another advantage is it will improve your CV cause employers like
people
 who have a wide range of
experience
. The disadvantage of working in the same
company
 is repetitive working space, doing the same thing every day for the rest of your life can be boring and for
this
 reason, a lot of
people
 have changed
job
 because it wore them out of their humanity.
Second
 is if the community in that
company
 is toxic, you would
experience
 sadness and even depression. Another con of changing
job
 frequently is it requires a wide range of skills that not everybody has,
second
 is safety, you might not be welcome in your new workplace and you might
experience
 harassment from your co-worker. Both have advantages and disadvantages, but you should experiment with both methods to see what suits your lifestyle.
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