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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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There are two maps which illustrate the way to get to a
city
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 hospital both in 2007 and
in
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apply
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2010.
Overall
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,
main
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the main
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 differences are separated car parks for
staff
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 and
public
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the public
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, constructed
bus
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station
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stations
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 and roundabouts.
Firstly
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, in 2007,
car
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the car
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 park was
same
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the same
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 place for
staff
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 and
public
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the public
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.
However
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, it was divided for
staff
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 located between
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city
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the city
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 hospital and
city
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road
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, which was
same
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the same
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 as in 2007, for
public
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the public
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 created
in
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on
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East
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the East
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side
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 of
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city
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a city
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 hospital. Each space became bigger by being divided them.
In addition
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, there were 6
bus
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 stops along hospital
road
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 in 2007, three of them
was
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were
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in
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on
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East
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the East
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side
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 and others
in
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on
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West
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the West
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side
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. But
new
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a new
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bus
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 station was built
in
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on
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West
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the West
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side
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 of
hospital
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the hospital
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road
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 in 2010, and it was connected to both
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city
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the city
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 hospital and
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city
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the city
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road
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 by
constructed
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constructing
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 two new roundabouts. In conclusion, from 2007 to 2010, car parks were divided
for
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between
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staff
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 and
public
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the public
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, and new
bus
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station
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stations
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 and roundabouts were constructed.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, staff, bus, road, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "divided" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic flow
  • road access
  • ring road
  • bus stops
  • bus station
  • congestion
  • parking facilities
  • pedestrian crossings
  • vehicular flow
  • organizational structure
  • accessibility
  • enhancements
  • configuration
  • dedicated
  • diverting traffic
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