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Some people prefer to stay in the same job for same company, but other prefer to change job frequently. You should use specific reason to compare the advantages and disadvantages of both sides.

#people #job #company #change #reason
The whole people more prefer to change a spot about some issue because they
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 satisfy with anything.aa well aa they watching a good company.in my opinion
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 idea is some specific reason about modifications activity. Some individuals prefer to stay in the same post for the same company but others prefer to shift jobs again and again. The main advantages of
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 course are people increasing a good chance of getting a new high parmosiom about the same task.example my elder brother still working in an LLC company for 7 years and owners provide good facilities because they working in a long day to it.while one more advantage employee day by day increases the experience of the same activity and
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 style good for future updates. Other hands disadvantages to changing an office suddenly because more than candidates looking for a good career as well working.they
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 prefer to present industry.employees don't have more confidence about any jobs because they don't
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 spend extra moments a the same jobs they change again and again task so owners pay normally because workers do not have a good condition about any paid job.For ,
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example I am more prefer good work because now time whole people need a good salary but I am changing production again and again so that way now time I am not staying in a good place. In my ,conclusion the government should provide good facilities for all companies as well as owners pay good and increase money for work experience.
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