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Some people prefer to stay in the same job for same company, but other prefer to change job frequently. You should use specific reason to compare the advantages and disadvantages of both sides.

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 security is important for everyone
especially
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 during
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pandemic
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. While many have lost their source of income, the companies who managed to survive made sure their
employees's
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job
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jobs
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 were secured. But the
pandemic
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 had given us
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time to reflect on what exactly we want in life and what career path is
pandemic
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 proof, some people decided to change jobs while
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others
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 decided to stay. Staying in the same
job
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 gives you a sense of security and belonging. The feeling of belonging to the same team
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 needed when companies returned back to
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 normal from remotely working.
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 is because we tend to care about each other's wellbeing when we were away from each other during work from home. Those Zoom meetings kept up a little bit socialised.
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, the
pandemic
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 made us realise that the current
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 we have is not enough and not
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 proof. We realised that the expenses were high
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during
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,
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than
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 when we were at the office. Everyone had the time to reflect on what really they want in life.
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, many people have taken up
onlince
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online
 courses to improve their skills , while some had taken a brand new course to go to a different direction altogether. Staying in the same
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 might be good to increase the work experience in the resume, but a
job
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which
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 doesn't make us happy or satisfies our basic needs isn't worth it.
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, a change is required though it might be a little difficult to get a new
job
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 during
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pandemic
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. And changing jobs often sometimes reflect on the image of the employee, and might depict him as a person who doesn't take a
job
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 seriously.
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