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Some people prefer to stay in the same job for same company, but other prefer to change job frequently. You should use specific reason to compare the advantages and disadvantages of both sides.

#people #job #company #change #reason
This
Correct determiner usage
These
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days
Change to a genitive case
day's
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 peoples want to
work
 in a single
company
 as
a
Change the article
the
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 same
worker
Replace the word
work
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 while
the
Correct article usage
apply
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others
somtimes
Correct your spelling
sometimes
 prefer to change
job
Fix the agreement mistake
jobs
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. In my
opinion
Add a comma
,opinion
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 you have to
work
at
Change preposition
in
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the
Correct article usage
apply
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different spaces if you need to grow up in your career. On the
one
 hand, there are many pros in changing
job
.
Initially
, some companies prefer experienced
specialist
Fix the agreement mistake
specialists
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 rather than a new
one
such
 as
Correct your spelling
postgraduate
postgraduates
Correct article usage
a postgraduater
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postgraduater
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more postgraduate
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.
For
example
Add a comma
,example
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 when I applied for a
job
 with my friend who had worked earlier, the
company
 took my friend and they
explained
Add the preposition
toexplained
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 me that he had some knowledge about
this
work
.
Secondly
, somebody like
change
Change the verb form
changing
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 their
job
 because of their interest of
work
 adventure. By
this
Add a comma
,this
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 I mean that if you leave
one
job
to
Change preposition
for
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 another you can find
new
Correct article usage
a new
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 salary, colleges and something like that.
One
Correct your spelling
On
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 the other hand, I believe that working at
same
Add an article
the same
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company
 is easy.
First
 and foremost, how many you stay at the same
company
 you can grow up and earn lots of experience.
As a result
Add a comma
,
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you can increase your salary and realize your wishes.
Additionally
, someone
don't
Change the verb form
doesn't
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 want
leave
Fix the infinitive
to leave
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 from
company
Add an article
a company
the company
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 that they worked for a long time.
In contrast
 to others, they need to any adventure and they are
in
Change preposition
on
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 the side of changing climate. In conclusion, I really believe whenever I
work
 on the top and for
this
Add a comma
,this
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 I will change my
work
.
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