environmental problems such as pollution and climate variations are increased nowadays the government have taken measures at the global level but they got only few solutions what is it so and how can this problem be solved.

In
this
modern age , there is not only technological advancement but
also
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in the environment's
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safety
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such
as climatic changes and contamination of mother earth.The measures
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by the world leaders to reduce
this
is not effective .
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demonstrates
the solutions that can be devised for
such
problems. On one hand , people around the world are busy with their own work and
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the important factors
such
as atmosphere and
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adulteration
that is
persisting , which would lead to
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of the planet in the long run.
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government
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has to spread awareness amongst citizens of the world not only on how to eradicate these issues
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but
also
on why should
this
be done.
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of resolving
this
issue.
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should make sure rules are implemented so that individuals follow these rules without fail. Because people follow things more effectively when there is something at stake. A case
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is a wonderful rule
that is
followed in a local community where they have taken an oath that they would not discard any toxic and medicinal waste out on
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as it is harmful and contaminates the soil, creating
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land pollution.
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the problem but
also
putting forward efforts to accomplish it. In conclusion , all the problems would be resolved if an
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individual
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completely
known about the issues and the consequences and should be
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willing
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one way or the other.
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