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Doctors say that people do not enough exercise.What are reasons?Suggest some solution.

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Doctors around the world warn about the lack of physical exercise that many
people
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 are not getting. The main reason behind
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 is a sedentary lifestyle. The following paragraphs will describe the reasons and some solutions.
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 with, in
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 era of modernism, everyone is a part of a rat race.
People
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 have become workaholics.They
work
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 round the clock and do not have enough time to do some physical
work
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.
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, the jobs nowadays are computer-based so the folks are unable to perform some physical tasks. They just stick to
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the computer
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computer
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computers
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 all the time.
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 to
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, individuals use motor
vechiles
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vehicles
 even though the distance is short to show their level of standard. Another reason is
lack
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the lack
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 of awareness of
benefits
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the benefits
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 of exercise. To save
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the body from detrimental disease,
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people
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 should start taking a
breaking
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 from sitting
work
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 and try to do some physical
work
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 or they can walk around.
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, the office hours should be fixed so that
people
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 will find some spare time
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theirself
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themselves
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 to perform any game or go to
gym
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the gym
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 so that their bodies remain fit.
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, they should avoid using vehicles for short travelling. They should go
by
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on
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 walking or use bicycles. To conclude
people
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 nowadays are becoming inactive toward the fitness and I have explained the reasons but if they are made aware about the ill effects and motivated to make some modifications
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 surely it would make a big difference.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedentary
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • motivation
  • physical limitations
  • lack of time
  • fear of injury
  • exercise facilities
  • misunderstanding
  • benefits of exercise
  • social support
  • poor health conditions
  • awareness
  • appropriate exercises
  • guidance
  • financial constraints
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