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Prison is the best punishment for criminals. How far do you agree or disagree with this statement. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In today's fast-paced world, the crime rate is becoming increasingly high.So how to deal with
this
 problem?Some people argue that locking up criminals is the best solution while others including me disagree with
this
 notion.
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modern jails is considered to be
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very comfortable place for their inmates as it is provided with all the amenities
such
 as luxurious beds,TVs, computers and sports facilities.
In other words
, sentencing prisoners with imprisonment is like sending them to a holiday camp.If the prison acts as a deterrent it should be tough to undergo. Another reason why I disagree with
this
 controversial issue is that not all offenders have a danger to society.To take an example of shoplifters,being in the same place with murders,rapists gives them the opportunity to learn how to commit much more serious crimes while they are inside.
On the other hand
,the penalty of being locked up provides the public with safety.To be more precise,having
such
 kind of hazardous people can harm the life of the residents of the city. To draw the conclusion, the penitentiary is believed to be the best way to punish,but I strongly believe that it can be too soft or can lead to much more serious crimes after being released.That's why violators like deliberate killers should be and must be sentenced with capital punishment.
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