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some people think the best way to solve global enviromental problems is to increase the cost of fuel to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Every country
face
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 global
environment
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 problems and they are very concerned
how
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 to decrease those problems.
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, it is sometimes thought the best way to
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 it to increase the cost of fuel. In my opinion, I considered that environmental issues can be solved in different manners. There are several reasons to decline the matter of global
envirionmental
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environmental
. The
first
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 and foremost important thing is that to ban the
single use
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 of
plastic
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.
Plastic
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 is
non-biodegradable
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a non-biodegradable
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 item and it is very harmful
for
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environment
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the environment
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.
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, in one survey has conducted in the UK, 50% of environmental causes
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 by
plastic
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.
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, if government take
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apply
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strict action
aggainst
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against
 use of
plastic
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 bottles, straws, carry bags and so on so,it is possible to reduce that problem. Another point to consider to solve
environmental
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the environmental
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problem
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problems
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 is to encourage
people
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for
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more
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move
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to plantation
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plantation
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plantations
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. In big cities, more
people
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 are doing
deforstartion
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deforestation
 to build tall buildings and industries and it is
also
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affect
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 weather
changing
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, without
trees
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,trees
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 it is very hard to keep
air
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the air
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 clean and neat and
people
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 are getting a lack of rain.
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,
palnts
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plants
 and trees are the best way to stop
that problems
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that problem
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.
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, fuel is responsible
getting
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for getting
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 more issues in
environment
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the environment
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. nowadays persons prefer their own vehicles for
trasnportation
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transportation
 and
this
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trand
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trend
 is booming.
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,
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raising
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rasing
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raising
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 the cost of
fule
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fuel
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 could
be help
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help
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 to fall down the global
warmning
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warming
. In conclusion, numerous ways are available to solve the global environmental issues and government should encourage
people
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 to use renewable things and try to
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solve
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slove
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solve
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it
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them
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  • emissions
  • alternative energy
  • conservation
  • mitigate
  • renewable energy technologies
  • affordability
  • collective action
  • innovation in energy efficiency
  • global cooperation
  • environmental measures
  • pollution
  • economic disparity
  • revenue
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