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Developed countries have created many environmental problems in the world, particularly in thier contribution to global warming. Why is global warming a problem? What can be done to reduce the dangers of global warming?

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Every country faces global environmental
problems
 and they are very concerned about how to solve those
problems
. In my opinion, I considered that the problem of global warming can be solved in many different manners. There are several reasons to increase the environmental
problems
 in drastically way. The
first
 and foremost important thing is that raising the use of own vehicles.
For instance
, in one survey has conducted in the Uk,
people
 prefer
there
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 personal cars and
moterbikes
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motorbikes
 for transportations and it is dramatically inclined over the past years.
As a result
, the smoke from the transport machines
are
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mainely
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mainly
 responsible for
the
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global warming. Another point to consider expanding the problem of global warming means declining the plantation, In big cities,
people
 are doing deforestation to build tall buildings and industries.
Therefore
,
human
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humans
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 are facing major changes in the weather.
For example
, without, trees it is very hard to keep the air clean and neat and
people
 are getting a lack of rain.
Hence
, deforestation is
also
cause
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 of global warming.
On the other hand
, it is not impossible to solve the environmental problem.
Firstly
,
government
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the government
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 should encourage to
people
 use
of
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public transport.
Secondly
,
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a person
the person
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person
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people
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 should more aware
about
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of
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 the importance of plants and trees.
Finally
, single-use of plastic should
also
 be banned. In the conclusion, environmental
problems
 have
became
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 a major issue in
the
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developed countries, but we have numerous ways to
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solve
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slove
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 them.
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