People nowadays are spending more time at the work place and it is argued this is a problem for family life.To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Both
parents
are working full
time
.Due to bad economic
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,
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society is utilizing most of
their
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time
looking for income whereby,
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is detrimental to the family.As far as am concerned,
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agree with
this
concern,
this
is because busy
parents
have less contact with their
children
and again there is
alot
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a lot
of responsibility to fulfil in terms of paying bills.
Firstly
,busy
parents
have less contact with
children
thus
they spend most of the
time
with friends or nannies whereby they end up not being close with them.
In
addition
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women traditionally stayed at home to cook,clean and look after
children
.
For example
,in 2015 it was reported in the star times that 70% of
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parents
are going to work out of 1000
parents
unlike some decade ago most women were
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.
Therefore
,inadequate
time
to be with the family has facilitated
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impact
to
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the
children
during the upbringing.
Secondly
,
Parents
are being faced with
alot
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a lot
of demands to fulfil
therefore
manage most of their
time
looking for resources to make sure the demands are met.
In addition
,
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difficulty has made even family can
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no longer
eat meals together
this
is because of different working schedule.
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,in 2021 it was reported in the standard
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news paper
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that 80% of teenagers are influenced by peer pressure due to sub-standard parenting.
Therefore
,costing so much to bring up family has led to
dimerit
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demerit
which have affected the bond of the
children
and
parents
To sum it up,family bonding has been affected by
parents
being engaged at work deligating house chores to other people which has led to negative impact.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

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