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Some people think it’s better to choose friend who always have the same opinions as them. Other people believe it’s good to have friends who sometimes disagree with them Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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As some people think it is better to have
friends
 with similar opinions as them, whereas others disagree, they think it is better to be
friends
 with people who got polarizing opinions. In my opinion, being
friends
 with
opposing
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an opposing
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point
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 of view is better To start with, it is easy to be in
company
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the company
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 of
friends
 who are
like minded
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 because they got
similar
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a similar
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taste
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tastes
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 in most of the activities like movies, music, sports, and food.
For example
, if a friend’s circle like to watch action movies, it gets easy for the individual to convince his/her
friends
 to watch the
next
 action movie which is about to release.
Also
,
friends
 with
same
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 opinion encourage and motivate their
friend
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friends
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 over important life
decision
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decisions
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. To exemplify, if a person is struggling over his
decision
 to pursue masters
aboard
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, his/her
friends
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friend's
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 positive views can motivate him to pursue his dream.
To
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 the contrary, People who are
friends
 with opposing views tend to get the best advice for their
decision
 because they get to understand both the point of view and settle on
solution
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a solution
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 which best suits their
decision
.
Also
,
friends
 with dissimilar taste, encourages their
friends
explore
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 more avenues like movies and music based on
different
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a different
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 genre,
this
 helps the individual to grow his/her mindset. To conclude, It is always said that choose your
friends
 wisely
,
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 because it’s your friend’s company that defines you.
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 being in
company
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 of
friends
 with different
view point
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 will help the individual to broaden his viewpoint and explore different aspects of his life.
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