In some countries, children are encouraged to compete against each other. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this approach?

There are many countries where contention is promoted among people from young
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I am going to illustrate the pros and the cons of
this
approach. The main argument in favour is that people should learn many
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of their life from childhood and understanding comes through comparing.
For example
, my son was not interested in English and found
this
enough boring, but his
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friend showed
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score in
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subject all time. My son
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heard
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kind and fabulous words about his classmate, decided to improve his skills and now he is the
first
in his class.
Moreover
, young
children
like sport
competition
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where victory is
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only after
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workout.
Thus
, when
children
realize their value among peers, they became stronger and make their tasks better. There are,
however
, some drawbacks
such
as
children
are not equally smart in every school
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or strong in each
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.
For instance
, our neighbour is a really musical talented girl but she does not understand
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mathematics
rules, makes huge mistakes in her school tests and
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gives her low marks. Many parents
also
force their
children
to be the best in that subjects where
chidlren
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children
are not engaged or
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have poor
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pieces of knowledge
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. So, often
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child self-estimation is fall down. In conclusion,
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in
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some negative points.
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advantages
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give
children
motivation and weight in their society. Indicated disadvantages include problems with
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adaptation
that life aspects which are
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familiar
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children
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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