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People should follow the customs and traditions when they start to live in a new country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Moving to a different country is accompanied by ample changes in
people
's
lives
 since every country has a personal identity. If
people
 prefer to continue their
lives
 abroad, they should cease to live their prior
lives
 and launch to implement the traditions of the country they moved to. While I accept
this
 argument to a certain extent, I believe that
people
 should not extinguish their authentic aspects completely. A reason why I agree with the idea is that adaptation duration is one of the indispensable and crucial parts of living overseas.
People
 can perceive some regular behaviours from a foreign person as a disrespectful attitude towards their culture and they can exclude the foreign. To illustrate,
people
 should wear if there is a traditional outfit on special days in order to avoid hurting locals' feelings. From another point of my view, it should
also
 be taken into account that
people
 cannot change their roots.
Although
 they will be accustomed to a different culture,
people
 are always bonded to their home countries strictly. They can maintain their
lives
 abroad without losing their native identity. A good illustration of
this
, there is more than a million Turkish
people
 have been living in Germany for years, yet the vast majority of them still visit Turkey. The main reason for
this
, it is hard to forget everything regarding childhood, language, traditions or local foods. I believe that if a person loses their genuine side, it is highly likely that they cannot form a new side as it is impossible to fit a discrete culture. To conclude, I can plausibly agree with the argument since
people
 should follow suit and live according to residents.
However
, it should be kept in mind that everybody belongs to the place where they were born.
People
 cannot change themselves radically. I suggest that it would be welcomed to live according to their traditions as long as they are careful.
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