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The range of technology available to people is increasing the gap between the rich and the poor. Others think it has an opposite effect. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#range #technology #people #gap #effect
Nowadays technologies take
major
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 part
of
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 human's society. Some
people
 think devices that are in use of rich and poor is increasing gap, while others don't agree with that point of view. The world is improving and developing fast, so different gadgets and technologies are
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 almost every month. So many companies in
technological
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the technological
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 industry compete with each other,
in
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result
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 invent
mindblowing
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stuffs
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. I could agree that the
wange
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range
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 of things change
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availability to poor and rich, but it is all about quantity of devices that we have in a market today. Basically, they might all have the same functions and features, but the cost may differ cause of popular
brand's
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 marketing manipulation. After all,
people
 can make a
coice
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choice
 according to
his
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their
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 perception and finance.
On the other hand
, it is quite arguable, because in present time majority do not pay
such
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big attention to the cost and finance, if they definitely know the thing they need for different necessities.
Also
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 some
people
 can
be tend
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 to buy electronics from one firm only. In conclusion, as
market
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a market
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 place of technologies is increasing every day
people
 have more choices according to their own perceptions and different financial states.
However
, I state that marketing could have a big influence on society, so
population
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the population
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 doesn't usually feel the gap of users.
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