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Some people think that the government should increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles in order to solve environmental problems. To what extend to you agree or disagree?

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christmas
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 is changing
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 a celebration
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, generation after generation, I will tell a story about my family and how they are celebrating every
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 since I was young. Every
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 my family get together and put the tree with a lot of lights and toys. There was one
Christmas
 when we went to Monterrey and while I was
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cooking
, my cousins get the presents for everyone and start playing the
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music
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 I was very
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comfortable
 because there were always glad and telling a lot of stories;
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 party are really fun and I really love spending time with them.
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 celebration is to get to the beach and spend all the weekend together having fun at the sea, is
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highly
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 shoes in the sand.
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