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Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others think that it is better to get a job straight after school. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, the use of
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 is spread over the globe. Some claim that
teachers
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 will be completely replaced by
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 in the future. I ultimately disagree with
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'
feelings
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 and interaction with them in the class are tasks that can not be achieved without
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Teachers
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, as human beings, are able to understand the feeling of
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, while
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 alone can not do
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feelings
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 are a complex process and
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 is yet far from dealing with
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,
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 are able to know if the pupils misunderstand a certain topic through their facial expressions. Without
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,
students
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 will face many challenges in the classroom, while no one knows or understand that.
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,
technology
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 can not take the rule of
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, due to a lack of understanding of
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feelings
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, without
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classroom there is no interaction with
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. Because, only humans have the ability to interact, while other technological tools do not. According to
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recent research published by Freiburg university in 2019 : Scientists are unable to make interactive
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 as humans can interact. Even though, with help of robotic
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 in the future, interaction skills are probably to be absent in the classes.
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,
technology
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 can not replace
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 interactions. In conclusion, even though, the spread of
technology
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, I disagree with the ability to completely take place of
teachers
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 in the classroom. As it can interfere with the
feelings
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 of
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 and interact with them as
teachers
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 do.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Academic qualifications
  • Specialized skills
  • In-depth knowledge
  • Personal growth
  • Social development
  • Practical experience
  • Financial independence
  • Career progression
  • Professional networking
  • Education
  • Work experience
  • Successful career
  • Personal interests
  • Career goals
  • Decision-making process
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