Today, many people do not know their neighbors in large cities. What problems does this cause? What can be done about this?

Nowadays, it's common in metropolitan cities,
people
have no idea who
live
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besides
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their house. The main reasons for
this
people
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have busy
life style
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and become
selfcentred
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self-centred
self centred
.
Firstly
,
people
usually spend their
time
on their work so that, they get
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promoted
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on
higher
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level.
Therefore
, in
this
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they suffer their
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lifestyle
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life style
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and
also
that sweet moments
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that sweet moment
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which are unforgettable sometimes throughout
the
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life
.
For instance
, one of my
friend
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worked in
multinational
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the multinational
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company he was so passionate
in
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his work he had no social
life
even his neighbours did not know him personally. Once his wife was slipped from the stairs,
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their neighbours came and helped her but in
hospital
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the hospital
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when
doctor
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said them to inform her family members
then
his neighbours faced trouble because they did not
had
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his contact.
Secondly
,
people
become
selfcentred
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self-centred
self centred
nowadays, they find their own ways to get happiness like on social media. Most
of
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youngsters
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the youngsters
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spend their valuable
time
with their virtual
friend
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even they don't meet them single
times
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in their
life
. In
this
world don't have
any
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problem which has no solution,
this
problem can be addressed by increasing the interaction between
the
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people
. Everyone wants friends in his
life
but they don't have
time
to interact
every
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person so,
people
should find
way
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a way
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to gether
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together
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people
under a roof.
For example
, in my society every year organizes a
compitation
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competition
anyone takes part in it it helps to make a way to get closer everyone. In conclusion,
although
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life style
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lifestyle
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is very hectic and no
time
to know others personally,
people
should make balance in their
life
so, their
life
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better as all aspects.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sense of community
  • isolation
  • loneliness
  • support network
  • sense of security
  • trust
  • cooperation
  • social support
  • integration
  • community events
  • shared spaces
  • neighborly interactions
  • neighborhood watch programs
  • community engagement
  • technology
  • connect
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