Today, many people do not know their neighbors in large cities. What problems does this cause? What can be done about this?

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Nowadays, it's common in metropolitan cities,
people
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have no idea who
live
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besides
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their house. The main reasons for
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people
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have busy
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life style
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and become
selfcentred
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self-centred
self centred
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,
people
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usually spend their
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on their work so that, they get
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promoted
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on
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level.
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, in
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they suffer their
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life style
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and
also
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that sweet moments
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which are unforgettable sometimes throughout
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life
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, one of my
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worked in
multinational
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the multinational
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company he was so passionate
in
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his work he had no social
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even his neighbours did not know him personally. Once his wife was slipped from the stairs,
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their neighbours came and helped her but in
hospital
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the hospital
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when
doctor
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said them to inform her family members
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his neighbours faced trouble because they did not
had
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his contact.
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,
people
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become
selfcentred
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self-centred
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nowadays, they find their own ways to get happiness like on social media. Most
of
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youngsters
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spend their valuable
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with their virtual
friend
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friends
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even they don't meet them single
times
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in their
life
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. In
this
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world don't have
any
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problem which has no solution,
this
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problem can be addressed by increasing the interaction between
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people
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. Everyone wants friends in his
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but they don't have
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to interact
every
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person so,
people
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should find
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to gether
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together
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people
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under a roof.
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, in my society every year organizes a
compitation
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competition
anyone takes part in it it helps to make a way to get closer everyone. In conclusion,
although
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life style
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is very hectic and no
time
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to know others personally,
people
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should make balance in their
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so, their
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become
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better as all aspects.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sense of community
  • isolation
  • loneliness
  • support network
  • sense of security
  • trust
  • cooperation
  • social support
  • integration
  • community events
  • shared spaces
  • neighborly interactions
  • neighborhood watch programs
  • community engagement
  • technology
  • connect
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