Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required.  Discuss both views and give your opinion.

The chart below illustrates the worth of one country’s exports in different
products
in the period of 2015 – 2016. Simultaneously,
table
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the table
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depicts the incrementation and decrementation of values of each exporting
products
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product
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in 2016 compared with 2015. Overall, among five
products
namely petroleum
products
, engineered goods,
germs
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gems
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and jewellery, agricultural
products
and textiles only germs and jewellery export business have more value than any other
products
in 2015. On the one hand, in 2016 the change in
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of petroleum
products
have 3% more than its previous year and engineered goods worth have been risen to 8.5% (57.5 – 61.5
billion
$) from 2015 to its consecutive year. But for germs and jewellery
products
we can see
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in cost about 5.18% (43 – 41
billion
dollars) in 2016.
Similarly
, there is a minor increment of agricultural
products
about 0.81% in 2016, whereas there is a steep increment of textiles in 2016 about 15,24% (26
billion
dollars to 32
billion
dollars).
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • sports facilities
  • physical activity
  • exercise
  • chronic diseases
  • heart disease
  • obesity
  • inclusivity
  • participation
  • safe environment
  • social interaction
  • community engagement
  • comprehensive approach
  • health education programs
  • environmental factors
  • healthcare infrastructure
  • quality healthcare services
  • public health initiatives
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