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People are becoming famous with the help of TV programmes and the internet.\ Discuss the advantages and the disadvantages.

#people #help #tv #programmes #internet
It is widely accepted, that nowadays all people can become, well-known with the help of
TV
 programmes, shows and social networks, websites.
Furthermore
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 they can earn more
money
 than at works.
Therefore
 all persons try to go to
the
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TV
 shows or post videos on youtube and other social networks. Some Humans became famous because of their stupid things. Nowadays for more
individuals
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 the main thing is
earn
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to earn
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 more
money
.
In addition
, the
organisators
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organizations
organisation
 of
TV
 shows know about it and promise them about how
the
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they
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 can win million
dollars
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of dollars
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 in their program. Of
course
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 they do not give a guarantee. But many persons agree and
spending
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 their
money
 for their place in
this
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these
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 shows. It depends on our
lucky
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.
With
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this
 regard,
TV
 shows becoming famous because of some individuals stupid doings. Sometimes it is helpful for
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a person
the person
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person
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people
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 who
have
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 not
a
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work. They can earn on Instagram or youtube. They need
followes
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followers
 who will watch their video. It can be exemplified by celebrities and
blogers
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bloggers
. The
blogers
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bloggers
 can earn more
money
then
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than
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 some authorities.
Furthermore
, celebrities earn
money
 on youtube. When they post their music or dance clips,
also
 when post pictures on other websites. To sum up, people with
financial
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the financial
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problem
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problems
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 can become famous and earn
money
 for life with the help of
Internet
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the Internet
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. The main thing
is do
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does
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 not
trust
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for
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all programmes. It will be good if
this people
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this person
these people
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 will find
manager
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managers
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 because, managers are able to find and do
good
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the good
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connection
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connections
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,
also
 they can agree with programmes.
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