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Scientific research should be carried out and controlled by the goverments rather than private companies. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#research #goverments #companies
First
 of all,
the
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scientific
research
 probably
become
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 more objective when they are supported by private companies.
This
 is because they are hardly influenced by political changes.
Therefore
, the development of
research
barely
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 affected by authorities
which
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that
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 frequently aim to increase their electability, resulting in delays and interruption to obtain
a significant
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significant research results
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research
 results.
In addition
, the political party of
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government
goverment
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the goverment
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 are occasionally incapable of the scientific business. Owing to the authorities are not motivated to generate revenue, but they prefer to control the
research
 aim to look good
on
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in
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 the public's eyes.
On the other hand
, the focus and motivation from
scientist
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scientists
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 would increase when the scientific
research
are
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 covered by
goverment
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government
 authorities.
This
 is because
,
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 the
goverment
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government
 would bear the responsibility for the
research
 failure
due to
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 they are the main figure who is most visible to the public in carrying out
research
 policy.
Additionaly
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Additionally
Additional
, the
research
 process probably could be helped by
obtain
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a
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plenty of
resource
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resources
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 from
nation
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the nation
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 because
of
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apply
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the
goverment
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government
 has a priority to allow
the
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scientist
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scientists
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access
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 it.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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