The student who study from the school to university get benefit less and contribute less too, than those of student who go to travel or job and get skills and experience before going high. Do you agree or disagree?

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process is a debatable matter with merit and
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demerit
,
scolar
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scholar
who is being educated from secondary school to the institution of higher learning get
benefit
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to benefit
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less and is not productive
however
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,however
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,
undergraduate
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an undergraduate
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who go for a vacation or employment get
skills
and experience before proceeding to higher learning
thus
exposed to more benefit and is fruitful.As far as am concerned,
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disagree with
this
,
such
that education is
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systematic
and distractors can lead to
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out.
Firstly
,learning is systematic in that there is
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timeline for every level
such
that a
scolar
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scholar
solar
gain knowledge with fellow agemates whom they can reason together with
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minimum
challenges.Once the student is done with academic work,go ahead for
internship
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an internship
the internship
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which
expose
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them to
employment
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an employment
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enviroment
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environment
such
that, once they are fully employed they
the
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can utilize their
skills
and
experince
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experience
experiences
expense
.
For example
,in 2021 it was reported in Kenya by star newspaper that 80% of firms are advertising for
internship
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internships
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.
Therefore
, it is prudent for a
scolar
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scholar
solar
to follow
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a system
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that
work
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this
is because internship will expose them to
employment
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an employment
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environment whereby, they will be valuable in
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future
futute
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.
Secondly
,the pleasure and fun of travelling or starting to earn money is
such
a distractor in
academic
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the academic
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cycle.
This
is because there is
responsibilty
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responsibility
that
come
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along.
Subsequently
,most
scholar
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scholars
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end
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up getting married that lead them to more challenges together with
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ongoing
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on going
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ongoing
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learning.
In addition
,despite having
skills
and experience,
theory
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the theory
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is imperative as it is with
this
that a student
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a certificate to authenticate learning took place.
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,in all job
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advertisements
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,it is a prerequisite to have
academic
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an academic
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certificate to qualify for a job.
Therefore
,
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the scholar
a scholar
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scholar
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scholars
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should follow
already
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the already
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working academic
process
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processes
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to avoid distraction. To sum up,education is systematic and distraction in the name of
skills
and experience can lead to
drop
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dropping
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out.
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