The student who study from the school to university get benefit less and contribute less too, than those of student who go to travel or job and get skills and experience before going high. Do you agree or disagree?
Education
process is a debatable matter with merit and Add an article
The education
dimerit
,Correct your spelling
demerit
scolar
who is being educated from secondary school to the institution of higher learning get Correct your spelling
scholar
benefit
less and is not productive Add the particle
to benefit
however
,Add the comma(s)
,however
undergraduate
who go for a vacation or employment get Add an article
an undergraduate
skills
and experience before proceeding to higher learning thus
exposed to more benefit and is fruitful.As far as am concerned,i
disagree with Change the capitalization
I
this
,such
that education is sytematic
and distractors can lead to Correct your spelling
systematic
drop
out.
Change the verb form
dropping
Firstly
,learning is systematic in that there is stipulated
timeline for every level Correct article usage
a stipulated
such
that a scolar
gain knowledge with fellow agemates whom they can reason together with Correct your spelling
scholar
solar
minimun
challenges.Once the student is done with academic work,go ahead for Correct your spelling
minimum
internship
which Add an article
an internship
the internship
expose
them to Change the verb form
exposes
employment
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an employment
enviroment
Correct your spelling
environment
such
that, once they are fully employed they the
can utilize their Correct article usage
apply
skills
and experince
.Correct your spelling
experience
experiences
expense
For example
,in 2021 it was reported in Kenya by star newspaper that 80% of firms are advertising for internship
.Fix the agreement mistake
internships
Therefore
, it is prudent for a scolar
to follow Correct your spelling
scholar
solar
system
that Correct article usage
a system
work
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works
this
is because internship will expose them to employment
environment whereby, they will be valuable in Correct article usage
an employment
Correct your spelling
future
futute
.
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the futute
Secondly
,the pleasure and fun of travelling or starting to earn money is such
a distractor in academic
cycle.Correct article usage
the academic
This
is because there is responsibilty
that Correct your spelling
responsibility
come
along.Change the verb form
comes
Subsequently
,most scholar
Change to a plural noun
scholars
end
up getting married that lead them to more challenges together with Change the verb form
ends
Correct your spelling
ongoing
on going
learning.Correct your spelling
ongoing
In addition
,despite having skills
and experience,theory
is imperative as it is with Add an article
the theory
a theory
this
that a student get
a certificate to authenticate learning took place.Change the verb form
gets
For example
,in all job advertisement
,it is a prerequisite to have Fix the agreement mistake
advertisements
academic
certificate to qualify for a job.Add an article
an academic
Therefore
,Add an article
the scholar
a scholar
scholar
should follow Fix the agreement mistake
scholars
already
working academic Correct article usage
the already
process
to avoid distraction.
To sum up,education is systematic and distraction in the name of Fix the agreement mistake
processes
skills
and experience can lead to drop
out.Change the verb form
dropping
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