Today, many people do not know their neighbours in large cities. What problems does this cause? What can be done about this?
Nowadays, it's common in metropolitan cities,
people
have no idea who lives beside
their house. The main Replace the word
besides
reasons
for Fix the agreement mistake
reason
this
is
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are
people
have busy
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a busy
lifestyle
and become self-centred.
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lifestyles
Firstly
, people
usually spend their time
on their work so that, they get promoted on
a higher level. Change preposition
to
Therefore
, in this
,race
they suffer their lifestyle and Add an article
a race
the race
also
that sweet moment which are unforgettable sometimes throughout their life
. For instance
, one of my friends worked in the
multinational company he was so passionate about his work he had no social Correct article usage
a
life
even his neighbours did not know him personally. Once his wife was slipped from the stairs, ,
Change the punctuation
apply
fortunately
their neighbours came and helped her but in the hospital when the doctor said them to inform her family members Add the comma(s)
,fortunately
then
his neighbours faced trouble because they did not have his contact. Secondly
, people
become self-centred nowadays, they find their own ways to get happiness like on social media. Most the
youngsters spend their valuable Correct article usage
apply
time
with their virtual friends even they don't meet them single
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a single
time
in their life
.
In this
world don't have no
problem which has no solution, Rewrite the sentence
don't have any
have no
this
problem can be addressed by increasing the interaction between people
. Everyone wants friends in his life
but they don't have time
to interact with every person so, people
should find a way together people
under a roof. For example
, in my society
every year organizes a competition anyone takes part in it it helps to make a way to get closer everyone.
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,society
although
lifestyle is very hectic and no time
to know others personally, people
should make balance in their life
so, their life
becomes better as all aspects.Submitted by grewalpt1249 on
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