Today, many people do not know their neighbours in large cities. What problems does this cause? What can be done about this?

#people #neighbours #cities

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?

Nowadays, it's common in metropolitan cities, community have no idea who lives

besides

Linking Words

their house. The main reason for

this

Linking Words

are

Change the verb form

show examples

community have

a busy lifestyles

Correct the article-noun agreement

a busy lifestyle

busy lifestyles

show examples

and become self-centred.

Firstly

Linking Words

community

Add an article

the community

show examples

usually spend their day on their work so that, they get promoted to a higher level.

Therefore

Linking Words

, in

this

Linking Words

Correct article usage

apply

show examples

race they suffer their lifestyle and

also

Linking Words

that sweet moment which are unforgettable sometimes throughout their activity.

For instance

Linking Words

, one of my friends worked in a multinational company he was so passionate about his work he had no social activity even his neighbours did not know him personally. Once his wife was slipped from the stairs,

Change the punctuation

apply

show examples

fortunately

Add the comma(s)

,fortunately

show examples

their neighbours came and helped her but in the hospital when the doctor said them to inform her family members

then

Linking Words

his neighbours faced trouble because they did not have his contact.

Secondly

Linking Words

people

Use synonyms

become self-centred nowadays, they find their own ways to get happiness like on social media. Most youngsters spend their valuable term with their virtual friends even they don't meet them

Change preposition

for a

show examples

single hour in their

life

Use synonyms

. In

this

Linking Words

world don't have

any

Correct quantifier usage

show examples

problem which has no solution,

this

Linking Words

problem can be addressed by increasing the interaction between

people

Use synonyms

. Everyone wants friends in his

life

Use synonyms

but they don't have time to interact with every person so,

people

Use synonyms

should find a way together

people

Use synonyms

under a roof.

For example

Linking Words

, in my ,society every year organizes a competition anyone takes part in it it helps to make a way to get closer everyone. In conclusion,

although

Linking Words

lifestyle is very hectic and no time to know others personally,

people

Use synonyms

should make balance in their

life

Use synonyms

so, their

life

Use synonyms

becomes better as all aspects.

Submitted by grewalpt1249 on Wed Dec 08 2021

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

10
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

0123456789.0505

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

282 words

🚀 Prepare for IELTS writing section today!

Unlimited Task 1 & Task 2 checks
Practice with essays, charts, and letters.
Personalized suggestions & mistake analysis
Spot every mistake and boost your score.
Topic ideas & vocabulary helpers
Expand your ideas and use the right words.
Progress tracking
Watch your writing improve with every practice.

Topic Vocabulary:

Community spirit
Isolation
Surveillance
Safety and security
Vulnerability
Support networks
Local gatherings
Foster
Social media platforms
Neighbourhood watch
Emergency situations
Natural disasters
Shared resources
Crime rates

What to do next:

Look at other essays:

5.5
band
Many people believe that children who grow up with little money are more equipped to deal with the problems life throws at them, in comparison to the kids who are born in wealthy families. This essay aims to substantiate this assertion.
The belief that children who grow up in a poor family are trained to face any obstacles in life is based on different examples worldwide. For instance, children who live in developing countries not only tolerate food shortages but also accept what their parents do for them. In Africa, children even harvest to collect crops for their feeding.
<4
band
Some people think it is important for all children to learn history in school. Others believe that other subjects are more relevant to children’s life. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Currently, I am working as a GIS Specialist. This job requires me to understand remote sensing and mapping. As a GIS staff, I am required to do mapping according to the existing needs for the company's needs. The tasks I did were developed manual digitization analysis through Sentinel-2 imagery in Papua Island, analyzed the deforestation rate in Papua Island during 2017-2022 using remote sensing, and wrote about the results of the deforestation rate in Papua Island in 2017-2022. The field I learned is very relate to my daily life as an Applied Meteorology student who always plays with data and mapping. I consider a GIS Specialist to be very familiar with mapping and remote sensing work. I believe that the skills I have can be useful for the organization I am currently in.
8
band
Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to cooperate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
We are living in an extremely competitive world. This society is continuously pushing us, making us feel that we must be the best in everything we do, and that we must have a rivalry with our colleagues to be better or to get more recognition than them. However, in the long run, I don’t think this theory has been proven true. In this essay, I would like to argue why I believe that the education approach should be reconsidered in our schools, so kids stop competing between themselves and are shown the importance of cooperation to achieve their goals.
6.5
band
All parents want the best opportunity for their children. There are some people who think that schools should teach children skills but others think having a range of subjects is better for children’s future. Discuss both of the views and give your opinion.
It is popularly believed that every parent want to provide the best employment options for their children. While some families think that schools should be imparted in schools, others consider that teaching youngsters a wide range of subjects would be best for their future careers. However, I believe that combining both skill development with academic learning is an excellent strategy for adolescents' growth.
5
band
In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this case? What can be done about this problem?
Nowadays, with the technological advancements in the agriculture sector, yield of food production can be maximized. Yet, famine issues are still a major problem in some parts of the world. This essay will try to identify the problems and also explain some solutions that can tackle the issues.

Today, many people do not know their neighbours in large cities. What problems does this cause? What can be done about this?

Your opinion

Many people believe that children who grow up with little money are more equipped to deal with the problems life throws at them, in comparison to the kids who are born in wealthy families. This essay aims to substantiate this assertion.

Some people think it is important for all children to learn history in school. Others believe that other subjects are more relevant to children’s life. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to cooperate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

All parents want the best opportunity for their children. There are some people who think that schools should teach children skills but others think having a range of subjects is better for children’s future. Discuss both of the views and give your opinion.

In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this case? What can be done about this problem?