Today, many people do not know their neighbours in large cities. What problems does this cause? What can be done about this?

Nowadays, it's common in metropolitan cities, community have no idea who lives
besides
their house. The main reason for
this
are
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community have
a busy lifestyles
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a busy lifestyle
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and become self-centred.
Firstly
,
community
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usually spend their day on their work so that, they get promoted to a higher level.
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, in
this
,
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race they suffer their lifestyle and
also
that sweet moment which are unforgettable sometimes throughout their activity.
For instance
, one of my friends worked in a multinational company he was so passionate about his work he had no social activity even his neighbours did not know him personally. Once his wife was slipped from the stairs,
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fortunately
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their neighbours came and helped her but in the hospital when the doctor said them to inform her family members
then
his neighbours faced trouble because they did not have his contact.
Secondly
,
people
become self-centred nowadays, they find their own ways to get happiness like on social media. Most youngsters spend their valuable term with their virtual friends even they don't meet them
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single hour in their
life
. In
this
world don't have
any
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problem which has no solution,
this
problem can be addressed by increasing the interaction between
people
. Everyone wants friends in his
life
but they don't have time to interact with every person so,
people
should find a way together
people
under a roof.
For example
, in my ,society every year organizes a competition anyone takes part in it it helps to make a way to get closer everyone. In conclusion,
although
lifestyle is very hectic and no time to know others personally,
people
should make balance in their
life
so, their
life
becomes better as all aspects.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Community spirit
  • Isolation
  • Surveillance
  • Safety and security
  • Vulnerability
  • Support networks
  • Local gatherings
  • Foster
  • Social media platforms
  • Neighbourhood watch
  • Emergency situations
  • Natural disasters
  • Shared resources
  • Crime rates
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