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Some people believe that full-time university students must spend their time studying, although others believe that besides educating from universities collegians should doing other actions too. I completely agree that students should do other activities besides studying in the following paragraphs, I intend to outline the arguments about both sides.

#people #university #students #time #universities #collegians #actions #activities #paragraphs #outline #arguments
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 rather than studying.
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 they can’t learn sufficient academic education and they might fail the course and
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 not something legitimate and sensible for collegians.
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 applications about your field and you can’t learn them if you don’t study the theory
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, Studying too much is not always good and it might bring stress for
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. Allocating some
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 you learn other skills and it can benefit
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, an architect who knows the theory of his field,
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 in a building under construction will help him understand the theories that he or she learnt in university.
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, through extra
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students
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 learn life skills
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 management that will benefit them a lot in the distant future. To sum
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 so far, in my
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 I strongly agree with the idea that studying and
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 If the balance between these two don’t be overlooked.
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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