Some people believe that full-time university students must spend their time studying, although others believe that besides educating from universities collegians should doing other actions too. I completely agree that students should do other activities besides studying in the following paragraphs, I intend to outline the arguments about both sides.

Overall,
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are
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disadvantages
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spending
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Firstly
, If The
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they can’t learn sufficient academic education and they might fail the course and
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not something legitimate and sensible for collegians.
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academic skills are incredibly essential
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applications about your field and you can’t learn them if you don’t study the theory
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lectures.
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you have to learn applications like AutoCAD,Revit and suchlike.
On the other hand
, Studying too much is not always good and it might bring stress for
students
. Allocating some
time
for doing other
activities
is really important.
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you learn other skills and it can benefit
students
academically.
For example
, an architect who knows the theory of his field,
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in a building under construction will help him understand the theories that he or she learnt in university.
Additionally
, through extra
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students
learn life skills
such
as
time
management that will benefit them a lot in the distant future. To sum
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everything that has been
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so far, in my
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I strongly agree with the idea that studying and
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other
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simultaneously is essential
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If the balance between these two don’t be overlooked.
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