Write about the following topic. Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

Have you ever thought about the advertisements that interrupt your video while watching, catch your eyes while driving on
railway
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a railway
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or
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to
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it to
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you via SMS?
Advertisement
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have already become a part of our lives. Lately,
people
argued advertising by which some
people
consider
that
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it
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encourages customers to purchase unnecessary
products
, while others support advertising as a beneficial platform that offers
opportunity
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an opportunity
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for the customers to recognize and buy new
products
that they really need and could improve their lifestyles. Honestly, I fully agree with the
first
opinion especially nowadays companies are using
advertisement
as an attraction instrument for their useless
products
. The primary goal of advertising is to increase sales
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whatever
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what ever
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whatever
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the product is. Nowadays, companies are using social media influencers to advertise their
products
by releasing a
trend
that
encourage
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people
to buy the product and participate
by
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the
trend
.
For example
,
lately
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many Tik Tok influencers release a
trend
talking with a cactus talking game that just repeats their words. These videos become
worldwide
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a worldwide
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trend
for weeks and many
people
buy
this
game without thinking of the benefit just for participating in a stupid
trend
.
Moreover
, certain
advertisement
companies predict ways that push the customers to buy excessive
products
that they really don’t need
such
as making sales. Women are
main
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target of these promotions, by which ladies specifically will have the tendency to buy a number of clothes or makeup
products
which actually are already in excess of what actually they need just to
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advantage of the
so called
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‘sale’. As we conclude
although
people
might know and benefit from new
products
through
advertisement
,
but
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I do not agree that it will improve their lives.
Insignificant
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An insignificant
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number of promotions will lead the clients to purchase unneeded
stuffs
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stuff
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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