being a celebrity such as a famous film star or sports personality brings problems as well as benefits. Do you think that being a celebrity has more benefits or more problems.

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Living as a popular character in society,
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as a movie star or a
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star, has some benefits and problems. According to my opinion, the good things about
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issue are more
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its problems. I will explain
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issue with some examples.
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example
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being
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a celebrity provide you
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lot of
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and popularity.
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,  you are going to be a good role model for too many
people
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all over the world. Famous personalities in
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world have good money and
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, so that
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they have a
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and
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life just because of
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, they are famous and rich. They can live
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the
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they
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way
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they
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the
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they
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want.
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, they are rich they receive more
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then
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enough respect from their
funs
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fans
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,
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living as a person with
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of
honor
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is one of the
most good
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feeling
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that everyone
want
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to have
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a good experience.
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they get a lot of love that
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they will not feel alone.
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popular
people
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have good influence among
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so by doing good deeds they can easily inspire teenagers. To bring as example Rolando, he is one of the biggest
sport
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star
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stars
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, who build too many charity
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organizations
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through he is helping
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poor
people
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. So
people
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who
is
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his fun in global will follow
his
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this
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habit of donating his money to poor
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. That
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he is going to be a good role model for them. To conclude, having
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a famous celebrity has more advantages rather
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then
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disadvantages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Public scrutiny
  • Intrusive
  • Endorsements
  • Sponsorships
  • Financial security
  • High-profile collaborations
  • Social influence
  • Philanthropic efforts
  • Trust issues
  • Mental health challenges
  • Substance abuse
  • Pressures of celebrity
  • Expectations
  • Disconnect from reality
  • Normalcy
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