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The charts show the sale of five different kinds of jam from 2009 to 2014

The charts show the sale of five different kinds of jam from 2009 to 2014
#show #sale #five #kinds #jam
The line chart illustrates the amount of
five
 kinds of
jam
 sold in
five
 years (2009to2014).
Overall
,
strawberry
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the strawberry
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jam
 had sold steadily in
five
 years
whereas
,
sale
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the sale
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 of plum has been the only one which plummeted in these
five
 years. Out of
five
 flavours of
jam
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,jam
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 the
sale
in
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of
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 grape
jam
 elevated sharply from 2009 to 2014 as it decreased
accordingly
 in
case
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the case
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 of plum. A steady of 0.5% has been seen each
year
 and it reached
around
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the around
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4.5
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the 4.5%in
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%in
year
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the year
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 2014.
On the other hand
 ,plum starts from
2.5
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the 2.5%in
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%in
year
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the year
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 2009 and plunged constantly with 0 5% every
year
 till it reaches 2014.
Moreover
,
cherry flavoured
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cherry-flavoured
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jam
 showed a lot of fluctuations starting its
sale
from
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at
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 1.8% in 2009 after that it slightly rose to 2.6%. At
last
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,last
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 there was a steady surge of 1% and it falls to 3.2
%in
year
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the year
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 2012 to 2014. Raspberry initiated around
2.8
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the 2.8%in
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%in
year
 2009 and upsurged to 3.5% and the
sale
 reached around 5.2% ,from
year
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the year
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 2012 to 2014 it got
stabalized
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stabilized
stabilised
. Strawberry
sale
 starts from 3%from 2009 and gradually rise to 3.5%. In 2010 a sharp rise has been observed and it reaches 5
%in
year
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the year
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 2012 and climbed to 7
%in
last
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the last
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year
 (2014).
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words five, jam, sale, year, %in with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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