The charts show the sale of five different kinds of jam from 2009 to 2014

The charts  show the sale of five different  kinds of jam from 2009 to 2014
The line chart illustrates the amount of
five
kinds of
jam
sold in
five
years (2009to2014).
Overall
,
strawberry
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the strawberry
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jam
had sold steadily in
five
years
whereas
,
sale
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the sale
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of plum has been the only one which plummeted in these
five
years. Out of
five
flavours of
jam
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,jam
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the
sale
in
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of
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grape
jam
elevated sharply from 2009 to 2014 as it decreased
accordingly
in
case
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the case
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of plum. A steady of 0.5% has been seen each
year
and it reached
around
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the around
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4.5
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the 4.5%in
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%in
year
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the year
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2014.
On the other hand
,plum starts from
2.5
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the 2.5%in
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%in
year
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the year
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2009 and plunged constantly with 0 5% every
year
till it reaches 2014.
Moreover
,
cherry flavoured
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cherry-flavoured
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jam
showed a lot of fluctuations starting its
sale
from
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at
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1.8% in 2009 after that it slightly rose to 2.6%. At
last
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there was a steady surge of 1% and it falls to 3.2
%in
year
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the year
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2012 to 2014. Raspberry initiated around
2.8
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the 2.8%in
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%in
year
2009 and upsurged to 3.5% and the
sale
reached around 5.2% ,from
year
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the year
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2012 to 2014 it got
stabalized
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stabilized
stabilised
. Strawberry
sale
starts from 3%from 2009 and gradually rise to 3.5%. In 2010 a sharp rise has been observed and it reaches 5
%in
year
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the year
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2012 and climbed to 7
%in
last
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the last
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year
(2014).
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Vocabulary: Replace the words five, jam, sale, year, %in with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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