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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world
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Provided charts reveal the data of
water
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 consumption
purposes
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 in six areas of the world.
Overall
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, all given areas mostly spend
water
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 in agricultural sphere,
whereas
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 domestic
use
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 of
water
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 is the least. Central
Asia
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, Africa, South East
Asia
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 and South
America
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use
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 the great deal of
water
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 to agriculture 88
percent
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, 84
percent
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, 81
percent
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 and 71
percent
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, respectively. Remained two places: North
America
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 and Europe
use
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water
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 for industry, 48
percent
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 and 53
percent
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. Given all areas spend on domestic
use
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 less than the other two spheres. Central
Asia
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, Africa and South East
Asia
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use
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water
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 for domestic
purposes
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 only 7percent, 7percent and 9percent, respectively. North
America
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, South
America
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 and Europe
use
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water
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 for domestic
purposes
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 a bit more than the other countries: 13
percent
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, 19
percent
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 and 15
percent
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. The usage of
water
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 for industrial
purposes
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 is the least in 4 countries: Central
Asia
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 5percent, Africa 7percent, South East
Asia
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 12
percent
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 and South
America
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 10percent, respectively.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the sixth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, purposes, use, asia, america, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the sixth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • irrigation
  • domestic
  • industrial
  • regional disparity
  • economic structure
  • sustainable management
  • water-scarce
  • population density
  • urbanization
  • data trends
  • resource allocation
  • percentage distribution
  • extremes
  • variations
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