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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles ourweigh the disadvantages?

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In years to come, whole transports including automobiles, public transports and trucks will be operated without drivers.
People
 will use them for a reason, as a
passanger
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passenger
. There are numerous benefits and drawbacks of
this
 phenomenon. I believe, autopilot system of vehicles
more
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benefitial
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beneficial
 for us. In
this
 essay, l will look into both pros and cons of
this
 condition. Let's begin by looking at
profits
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 of human~free drive. Vehicles become much safer as
people
 do not operate them. Because
people
 can
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loose
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 control
on
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 driving cars because of state of being drunk or ill.
For example
,
the
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incidents like stealing the schoolbuses by shooting the driver will be less, if
bus
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 is operated automatically.
Secondly
, traffic congestions will be
considerable
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 less than now. Transport producers feature vehicles with
navigation
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a navigation
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system
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, which helps to detect traffic jam routes and use possible congestion~free
road
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instead
.
This
 can improve common congestion issues.
Moreover
,autonomous transports perfectly follow
trafffic
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traffic
 rules.
People
 may not drive carefully as artificial
intellegence
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intelligence
do
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. It can reduce the number of car accidents on the road.
On the other hand
,
autopilot
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 system may be the reason for arising some problems.
For instance
, in big urban areas
imlementing
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implementing
 human~free
drive
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driving
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 may cause a massive job loss.
Additionally
, there is still
common
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 misbelief to artificial
intellegence
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intelligence
 as some
people
 consider that it lacks
of
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ability
making
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 judgements. To sum up, the benefits of autopilot driving are superior to its drawbacks. It has
great
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 impact on
people
's health and life. Its cons can be dissolved with the help of technology.
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