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In most of the countries, people prefer to live in a rented apartment rather than buying a home. What are the advantages and disadvantages of living in rented accommodation?

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Most individuals prefer to stay in a private
house
 rather than own
home
 because they move again and again about work because companies change location after
few
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 months.In my opinion many disadvantages of living in rented advantages. On the one hand, Actually, folks depend on task because Some owners own many companies and they move the workers one to other workplace other words,
this
 way people do not prefer to baying a
home
 because they do not stay a long time in the same society
For
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 example, my friend family working In an LLC product Industry and It is many branches In my country and manager change the position and location after a few months that way my friend do not bay property they more prefer to living private
house
.
As a result
, the advantage of
this
 is people
does
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do
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 not spend a lot of money
about
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buying a
home
 . Forever,some disadvantages about It because
next
 level is not secure to live and children Explain,many crowds do not prefer to baying
home
 about some problems but it is not good in a future
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 example,
The
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 Japan serve in
last
 year about It 55% folks living rental
home
 in large cities because they do not bay own
house
.as a bad effect , future not secure because children have not owned
house
 because now family members more prefer to work in they change plot again and again. In my conclusion, whole people should be buying living areas because it is paramagnet ownership for you and
next
 carnation safe about It and they not worried about it.
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