Being a celebrity such as a famous film star or sports personality brings problems as well as benefits. Do you think that being a celebrity has more benefits or more problems?

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In modern society, commonly argued that being famous

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essay. In the

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, commonly the celebrities are rich and have good wealth for living without any problems.

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become somehow materialistic, the influencers always are able to provide their desire easily.

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with their personal life due to their fame. Even every

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of their

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and choices can be

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by everyone on social media.

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they go the

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take pictures from them. to sum up,

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

Public scrutiny
Intrusive
Endorsements
Sponsorships
Financial security
High-profile collaborations
Social influence
Philanthropic efforts
Trust issues
Mental health challenges
Substance abuse
Pressures of celebrity
Expectations
Disconnect from reality
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Being a celebrity such as a famous film star or sports personality brings problems as well as benefits. Do you think that being a celebrity has more benefits or more problems?

Fully explain your ideas

The governments should give each citizen a basic income so that they have enough money to live on, even if they are unemployed. Do you agree or disagree?

In recent years, many small local shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping centres or malls to do their shopping. Is this a positive or a negative development?

40.Some people believe governments should spend money in saving languages of few speakers from dying out completely. Others think this is a waste of financial resources. Discuss both views and give your opinion

Many people assume that the goal of every country should be to produce more materials and goods. To what extent do you agree or disagree that constantly increasing production is an appropriate goal?