Being a celebrity such as a famous film star or sports personality brings problems as well as benefits. Do you think that being a celebrity has more benefits or more problems?

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In modern society, commonly argued that being famous
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only advantages. But in my
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there are some pros and cons that
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essay. In the
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place, it is undeniable that being famous has many benefits in our life .
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, commonly the celebrities are rich and have good wealth for living without any problems.
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become somehow materialistic, the influencers always are able to provide their desire easily.
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people always tend to respect
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renowned.
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, 5 years ago an Iranian actor was passing by our city and suddenly he had
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crash in the middle of
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he asked
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on his
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and after 30 minutes almost
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persons gathered for helping.
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, Some celebrities have
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with their personal life due to their fame. Even every
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of their
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and choices can be
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by everyone on social media.
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it is annoying that
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they go the
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take pictures from them. to sum up,
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, there are many benefits for being famous like being rich. But, it is obvious that the drawbacks can have bad impacts on their
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Public scrutiny
  • Intrusive
  • Endorsements
  • Sponsorships
  • Financial security
  • High-profile collaborations
  • Social influence
  • Philanthropic efforts
  • Trust issues
  • Mental health challenges
  • Substance abuse
  • Pressures of celebrity
  • Expectations
  • Disconnect from reality
  • Normalcy
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