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Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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It can be denied that economic
development
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 is one of the most fundamental goals of each government.
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, there are many people who believe that other aspects still could be considered for a country. In
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 essay, the gravity of economics and the other fields for a ministry could be discussed. On the one hand, economic progress is an effective driving force for a country's
development
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.
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, the property accumulates through the
development
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 process,
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 could lead to the citizen being wealthy. For
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 reason, habitants would like to pay more attention to their status in the population,
such
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 as psychology, health or quality of education.
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, if the economic expansion is the growth of material facilities could be
force
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 the
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, there are numerous factors which are concerned by authorities.
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, environmental issues are experienced, especially in developing countries. Hundred
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of thousands
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thousands
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people
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of people
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 have to face health problems
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 as lung disease, respiratory disease,
it
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 leads to the death rate
increase
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 every year.
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, the gap between the rich and the poor expands despite the effort of authority.
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 situation becomes more serious in Covid 19 pandemic when the high unemployment rate and inflationary pressure is affecting the poor. It seems that social inequality is still an unsolved issue. In conclusion,
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 economic growth plays a vital role in the new policy of each regime, the management still needs to consider the other. In the end, sustainable
development
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 is a goal
which
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that
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 should be attained.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • standard of living
  • sustainable development
  • social equality
  • environmental degradation
  • cultural heritage
  • technological innovation
  • wealth disparity
  • human development index
  • holistic approach
  • quality of life
  • economic prosperity
  • healthcare system
  • education system
  • cultural diversity
  • policy decisions
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