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Some people think the government should pay for health care and education, but other people claim that it is the individual’s responsibility. Discuss both the views and give your opinion?

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Nowadays,
health
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care
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 and
education
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 have become the focus of people’s concern. It is a highly debated issue as to who should pay for these services. There are those who argue that the
government
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 should pay for them, while others think individuals should shoulder the costs.
This
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 essay intends to analyze both perspectives. Personally, I think that primary and secondary
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care
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 and
education
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 should be on the
government
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, but tertiary
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care
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 and
education
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 should be free for only those who are below a certain income level. It is irrefutable that it is the
government
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’s responsibility to make basic
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 and primary
education
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 accessible to everyone. The reason is that a nation’s prosperity very much depends on the contribution made by its well-educated citizens who are in good well-being. After ,all we all pay taxes and are entitled to get something back in return. Private schools and private hospitals can be available for those who want and can afford them, but free schools and free
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 hospitals should always be there.
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, individuals should be responsible for their advanced
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care
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 and higher
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. Actually, advanced medical and surgical treatments are very expensive. So,
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 of depending on the
government
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 people should take some
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 insurance or save in any other way with tomorrow in mind. Even higher
education
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 benefits the individual more than the nation. So, it is quite reasonable to pay for it from one’s pocket. There are, of course, some sections of society that cannot afford their own healthcare and tertiary
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. The
government
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 should provide free healthcare so that nobody dies for want of treatment. As far as higher
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 is concerned, the
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 can have some system of interest-free loans for the needy and meritorious students, who cannot afford their own
education
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. To sum up, it can be reiterated that basic
health
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care
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 and primary
education
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, should be paid for by the
government
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, but the individual should pay for advanced
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care
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 and
education
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 from his pocket.
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