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With the development of social media, more and more youngsters are being allowed unsupervised access to the internet in order to meet and chat with friends which can lead to potentially dangerous situations. What solutions can you suggest to deal with this problem?

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children
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 these days have complete
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 to the
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 and
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 has raised several questions about the safety of
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 practice.
Children
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 who frequently use social media apps for interacting with their friends without being supervised can become victims of vicious crimes. In
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 essay, I will discuss some measures that
parents
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 can take to protect their
children
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 from the dangers of
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 practice. The most effective solution is supervised
access
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internet
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.
Parents
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 can ask their
children
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 to share their passwords with them.
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 does not have to be considered a privacy violation because young
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 should not have anything to hide from their
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.
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,
parents
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 can ask the
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 to use the
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 while sitting in the
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 where other family members can see what they are doing. Recently, we heard several incidences of teenagers committing suicide after falling prey to fraudulent online crimes. In many of these cases, the
parents
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 were either unaware of the consequences of their
children
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’s online activities or they simply did not pay attention. In some cases,
parents
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 are unaware of the dangers lurking online and fail to protect their
children
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 who are equally naïve. It is important for the government to sensitize them. The government,
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, can include lessons in the school curriculum about safe online practices. Both
children
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 and their
parents
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 should be made aware of the dangers of unlimited
access
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 to the
internet
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Children
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 should be taught not to blindly trust people they find online. In conclusion, unsupervised
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 to the
internet
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 is harmful
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children
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 who cannot distinguish right from wrong. The only solution is to supervise their
access
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 to the
internet
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