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Some people think that environmental problems are too big for individuals to solve, while others think that the government cannot solve these environmental problems unless individuals make some action. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In today's world, we are standing before an enormous climate crisis,
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 as global warming. If we want our home to exist in the
next
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 30 years, we must take some serious actions. Some
people
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 reckon that
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 the government is not able to make any difference unless inhabitants help. In
comparision
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comparison
, some say that
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 an individual can not solve problems unless the whole world will join.
This
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 essay will
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analyse
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 both sides of
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the disagreement
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. As we all know, one person can not solve all the planet's issues. Even if he was dedicating all his life
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 saving the environment, he would not be able to make it.
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, a citizen of Calpe, one of the
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 in Spain,
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 went to the parks or beaches, in order to clean
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. Despite having a strong
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purpose
, he could not do it only by himself.
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, all the community and the government should support
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, if the cabinet
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 only take into consideration global warming problems and the rest
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 would not care, all the good
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intentions
 would not come into existence. I believe that
people
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 have to properly understand how significant the problem is, so
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 gain a purpose. At
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, the changes
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 their lifestyle do not need to be necessary
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, but to start from the easiest things and after some time add additional modifications.
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, after some time they would realise that these small improvements lead to
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.
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, rubbish segregation can be the
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 thing on which
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 can focus. Even nowadays, in
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 city of Warsaw, the
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 of
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 who have various
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bins for garbage increased and the
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 conditions
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 well. To sum up, I strongly concur, one individual can not make improvements only by himself. Our planet needs to be taken care
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 the whole society.
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, humans with power should incentive their citizens to start
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a more
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 friendly lifestyle for
their
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 better future.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environment
  • problems
  • individuals
  • government
  • solve
  • action
  • believe
  • big
  • impact
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • laws
  • reduce
  • carbon emissions
  • protect
  • planet
  • changes
  • daily life
  • recycling
  • water
  • driving
  • support
  • work together
  • voting
  • community
  • clean-up
  • policies
  • education
  • key
  • role
  • learn
  • personal
  • life
  • initiatives
  • raising awareness
  • motivate
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