Some people believe that it is the responsibility of individuals to take care of their own health and diet. Others however believe that governments should make sure that their citizens have a healthy diet. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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two or three decades, people have not been following a proper
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and
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care
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of their own well-being an enormously than ever before.
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, some think that people take
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their's own
health
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and
diet
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while others say that the ministry should ensure that their's citizens have a healthy
diet
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.
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essay discusses both viewpoints, I strongly agree with the former opinion for
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the
following reasons.
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with, individuals must take
care
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of their's own
health
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and
diet
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because
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this
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is the basic activities to properly maintain
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their's well-being. Every person's strength differents so they can give more attention to maintain a healthy lifestyle by
diet
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and proper exercise,
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, can be avoided
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, a recent report said by the Times of India, more than 60% of Indians adhere
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proper
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as well as take
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to
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their's own strength in order to they can live
healthy
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.
In contrast
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, the government should ensure to their's citizens maintain a proper
diet
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because
this
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is one of the
responsbility
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responsibility
of the ruling party. One country growth must be calculated by that countries people how to live without any illness,
thus
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,
this
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can improve the nation's
wealthness
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wealthiness
wealthiest
around the world.
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, in Australia ministry gives a proper
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chart to their's residents
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in school, they adhere
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proper
diet
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since
childhood
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their childhood
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period,
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,
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this
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territories folks have
a
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good
health
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and a minimum level of illness. To conclude, "
health
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is wealth" every person should give more attention to their's own well-being because each
persons
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person
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health
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is different from others. The ruling party must ensure
to
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their's residence strength by giving a proper
diet
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plan. In my opinion, about
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, individuals have many more responsibilities rather than the government. I believe that
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process is conducive to building a healthy society.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • health-conscious decisions
  • self-discipline
  • informed choices
  • personal accountability
  • regulating food industries
  • implementing policies
  • healthy eating
  • public health campaigns
  • subsidies for healthy food
  • enabling environment
  • accessible
  • affordable
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