A gift (such as a camera, a soccer ball, or an animal) can contribute to a child’s development. What gift would you give to help a child develop? Why? Use reasons and specific examples to support your choice.

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care
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give everything good to our
child
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for them
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with and help a
child
develop. I think an animal will suitable for a gift to a
child
develop,
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as a cat or a dog. Because an animal alive and live with a
child
same like a friend. They can play, walk and sleep with a
child
, the object can not do it. In fact, many
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in the world usually have
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animal in the house,
especialy
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especially
the family have children. the animal can play with a
child
and make her interesting and happy.
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child
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and play with his
child
everyday
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like a friend. It
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his
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