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A gift (such as a camera, a soccer ball, or an animal) can contribute to a child’s development. What gift would you give to help a child develop? Why? Use reasons and specific examples to support your choice.

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Nowaday
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, we
are take
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take
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 care
and
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of and
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 give everything good to our
child
, and
some time
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sometimes
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 we
are give
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are given
are giving
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 some
gift
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gifts
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 for them
play
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to play
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 with and help a
child
 develop. I think an animal will suitable for a gift to a
child
 develop,
such
 as a cat or a dog. Because an animal alive and live with a
child
 same like a friend. They can play, walk and sleep with a
child
, the object can not do it. In fact, many
family
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families
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 in the world usually have
a
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an
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 animal in the house,
especialy
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especially
 the family have children. the animal can play with a
child
 and make her interesting and happy.
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, My uncle has a
child
 in his house has a dog. the dog
live
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 and play with his
child
everyday
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every day
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 like a friend. It
help
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helps
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 his
child
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