Some people believe that technology has made man more social and others think that it has made him less social. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, it is fact that technology an integral part of our life, because of

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and gives my opinion. It is clear that the most significant

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are ease and clarity. To be exact, it means that thanks to social media we can socialize with our friends or family

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everywhere, or even find new, and do it very rapidly, what even a child can handle, or someones find a soul mate

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, new technologies make us more social.

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people meets each other in media, neither in real life.

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lighter, conversation with

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person is better, and make us more societal. To be more specific,

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and in reality is absolutely distinction

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people who

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in media, not like that in truth, since it

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different. In conclusion, despite the fact that technology in some ways

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advantageous,

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believe it makes us less sociable, and think that dialogue in real life make it.

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Topic Vocabulary:

social interaction
connect
communicate
video conferencing
stay in touch
online communities
forums
like-minded individuals
global communication
collaboration
access to information
knowledge
bridge the gap
social isolation
detachment
face-to-face communication
genuine human connection
maintain
real-life interactions
balance

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Some people believe that technology has made man more social and others think that it has made him less social. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

Fully explain your ideas

Heathcare and education are two important aspects of a nation and its population. Therefore, some people suggest that education and healthcare be free of charge and funded by the government.

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