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Robots will replace the teachers role in the future do you agreeor disagree?

In my view, nowadays
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 profusion needs a lot of energy for teaching the young generation. In my opinion, young boys and girls want to learn different subjects and sometimes choose
teachers
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. It is often argued, that
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's
character
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 influences to learn in various ways. The master should be experienced and they must change themselves. I want to write about dynamism and emotional
character
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. I will give you information about both of them. From my perspective, the
teachers
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 should not be
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dynamic and emotional
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. Because
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 students do not understand the different problems and do not want to take education.
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, young boys and girls interesting in computer games and do not pay attention to different subjects. It is a huge disaster for parents as students do not
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want
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teacher
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 will not be a dynamic and emotional person. From my point of view, it is not
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big trouble for a job. The reason why we do not pay attention is that it does not change anything.
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, if we look at effective instructors they are skilful and decide a lot of problems in the classroom. In common, I think
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 should be dynamic and emotional intelligence
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 have a different
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 for education. From my perceptive, nowadays
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 do not have only dynamism and emotional intelligence. They should know a lot of things for knowledge. Undoubtedly I think
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 have the biggest
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 for education.
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, they need kind and skill.
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 the instructor will be smart, wise, clever, intelligent, shrewd sensible, sagacious and
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 have dynamism and emotional
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. Because they teach and look after our children. We must respect the
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 profession.

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