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The plans below show the layout of a university’s sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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 diagram illustrates the University
Sports
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Centre
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 present and future advanced plans. From my perspective, there are numerous vital exchanges compared with the current map.
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, consider numerous people enjoyed the 25 Meter Swimming Pool kept as usual in front of the Reception. As well as made more suitable for society kept changing room and seating place both of no advanced same as before.
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, with limited space and having much more fun,
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 theory,
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 tries to improve leisure
centre
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 revenue as well. From
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 perspective, the exercise
centre
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 made some vital exchanges. To extend North of the bottom of the Gym Area, put two more Dance studios on the East right-hand side.
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, from future construction plans. It shows some significant improvements creatively two new places leisure pool and
sports
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 hall
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 of previous outdoor counts on Westside and Eastside.
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 to adding on two more changing rooms, on café bar and even a
sports
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 shop. To sum up, those essential advances will help the Univerity of
Sports
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centre
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 enhance training communication capacity and improve the
centre
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's income.
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