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Famous people sometimes give their opinions on public topics. Is this a good thing? Explain to what extent you agree or disagree.

#people #topics
Celebrities and other
well known
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people
 usually tend to give their views on topics that they are not very familiar
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 Can we always believe in all
what
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 they say?
This
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this
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this
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,
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 certain advice given by famous
people
 can be misleading to the public at large.
For instance
, cosmetics products recommended by celebrities are
often times
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 used by a number of
people
;
however
, sometimes it could be dangerous to use these products, which could cause severe allergies if used without proper guidance.
Therefore
, it is not
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it is not always safe to give general comments on topics
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 they are not fully aware
of
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. Another issue is that the value given
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 learned professionals is deteriorating over time due to the wide acceptance of the views given deriving out of fame.
For example
, actors give free tips on weight reduction, which has made
people
to
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blindly follow them without seeking
for
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professional consultation. Whereas, it is not acceptable for famous personalities to give their opinion on topics which they do not have the required knowledge. In conclusion, it can be said that even though popular
people
 voice out their opinions on all aspects, it is not always correct to do so
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 all times.
Hence
, they should act responsibly before addressing the public since there is a vast population who would believe and follow their advice, and
eventually
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 it might create issues
which
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 the
first
 place.
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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