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Education is not a luxury but a basic human righ and as such should be free for everyone irrespective of personal wealth. Do you agree or disagree?

#education #luxury #righ #wealth
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Education
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 is important for the development of the economy worldwide. But not everyone has access to a good to it. It is agreed that it should be free for everyone irrespective of personal wealth as it creates job and increase employment , as well as allows a
country
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 to improve economically through research and development of its own resources.
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, when a
country
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 has a higher rate and good quality
education
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, its citizens will always be able to open up their own businesses and employ other people.
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 , when the quality of teaching is good and it generates
a graduates
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graduates
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, the latter can open their own
businesssuch
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business such
 as
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a
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startup
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, and hire a few people to join their team. When
this
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 team got stronger , they can grow and
to
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expand their operation.
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,
education
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 can help a
country
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 improve its economy by identifying the problem , offering solutions and even identifying some resources which might need to be exploited and exported to increase its income and currency value.
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 , when the educational institutions produce a large number of engineers , who are specialized in different fields, these can be employed into many
governemental
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governmental
department
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toidentify
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to identify
 the different
problemrs
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problems
 that the
country
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 is facing , and to offer solutions by doing researches, gathering data with, doing risk management analysis on different aspects of any projects and transform their research into something concrete which can be produced or
eploited
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exploited
 and exported. In summary,
education
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 contributes a lot to the development of a
country
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 and should be free so that everyone can access it as it can create employment and improve the rank of one's
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