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Now lhe mochine is very complex, ond o lot of difficult work is outomoled. Does this machine have more prons than cons?

#lhe #mochine #ond #work #machine #prons
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Modern technology has equipped us with
machines
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, which are working like robots. There are positive and negative
effects
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 of these
machines
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 on the individual and
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society, which I shall highlight in
this
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 the pros outweigh the cons. On the positive side,
machines
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 are faster, more convenient and
energy saving
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. Households and industries are much facilitated with
machines
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. Personal use of
machines
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 gives people more free time to spend with family and pursue hobbies.
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, industrial use of
machines
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 reduces manpower for
work
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 and increases output. ln the words of Oscar Wilde - "On mechanical slavery, on the slavery of the
machine
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, the future of the world depends."
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, computer
machines
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 or robots manage our banks and even the tickets at the airport are issued by
machine
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-robot.
The computerization
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 certainly relieves human beings from
dull
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the dull
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 repetitive
task
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tasks
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 without
try
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trying
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 human error. What is more, robotic surgery is being done to overcome the
limitation
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limitations
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 of human beings
such
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the trembling
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trembling
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the trembling
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 of human hands. Microscopic surgeries and eye operations can be better done with the help of robotic surgeons. On the negative side,
machines
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 reduce the need
of
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for
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 manual
work
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, which can lead to unemployment
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especially in
the
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developing countries. What is more, insufficient knowledge of
machine
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 handling and operating is detrimental to uneducated workers and they end up getting injuries or disabilities
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 working with
machines
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. Technical failures can
also
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 disturb the whole working system and lead to losses. Other negative
effects
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 of
machines
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 are on the health of individuals, especially
the
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housewives who rely heavily on
machines
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 for
the
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household chores.
Machines
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 are a failure where creative
work
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 is required.
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,
machines
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 cannot reproduce the unique and original
work
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 done by many artisans.
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It
 has been rightly said that a
machine
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 can do the
work
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 of a thousand ordinary men, but no
machine
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 can do the
work
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 of one extraordinary man.
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, the positive
effects
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 of
machines
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 outweigh the negative
effects
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 on the individual and society.
However
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, in developing countries, in order to meet the employment needs of the population, a balance has to be maintained between manual
work
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 and mechanization.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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