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some people say that the main enviironmental problem oof our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. others say that there are more improtant environmental problems. Discuss both vies and give your own opinion.

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These days, many environmental
problems
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 are happening ranging from global warming and pollution to extinction.
Loss
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 of particular
species
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 of plants and animals
such
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 as white tigers, beluga whales and others are very important. Some say that there are more important environmental
problems
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. The
first
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 side,
problem
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the problem
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 of
loss
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 of
species
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 are indeed critical. They have
an
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 huge effect on us.
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,
food
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 webs will be broken and our
food
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 might not be available. When
grasshopers
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grasshoppers
 goes extinct,
then
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 the
amount
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 of birds
with
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decrease, the animals who eat birds,
such
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 as foxes will face losses as well. Like
this
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,
food
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 webs might be broken which can
also
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 lead to us, humans having
lack
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a lack
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 of
food
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that is
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neccesary
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necessary
 for us to survive.
On the other hand
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, there
are
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 always
bigger
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a bigger
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problem
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problems
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. It is because these
problems
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 can lead to other many
problems
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.
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, global warming can lead to everything being destroyed including Earth while the
first
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 problem ends up in the
loss
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 of certain
species
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. Pollution can lead to us having to leave Earth, but
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loss
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the loss
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 of
species
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 still allows us to live on our planet. These
problems
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 can
also
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 bring to
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loss
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the loss
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 of
species
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 which some says
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that
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is the most important.
This
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 proves that there are bigger
problems
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.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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