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Some people think woman should be allowed to join the army, the Navy and the air force just like men. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The chart below illustrates the worth of one country’s
exports
 in billions of
dollars
 in different categories from 2015 to 2016. overall, all the product
exports
 had risen at different percentage rates except agriculture and textiles. Now let’s see each export in detail. Petroleum goods have risen at the rate of 3% annually with an average increase of 10
billion
dollars
. Whereas the engineered goods rose at the rate of 8.5 % with the same average worth of 10
billion
dollars
 annually.
In contrast
 to other
exports
, the textiles rose up, which is the highest increase in terms of quantity, at 15.24 % with a total worth of 31
billion
dollars
Also
, agriculture products have risen at the rate of 0.85 %, which is the lowest amongst all the
exports
 of goods. The only product category that has fallen during the year 2015 to 2016 is gems and jewellery, which has fallen to 0.81 % total worth of 41
billion
 approximately.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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