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Some people believe that the aim of university education is to help graduates get better job. Others believe there are much wider benefits of university education for both individuals and society. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #aim #university #education #graduates #job #individuals #society
Helping graduates to get a decent
job
 seems
as
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 the chief purpose
from
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university
education
.
However
, I strongly believe that more advantages can be discovered to benefit both individuals and society. On the one hand, those who received a high-level
education
 are more likely to have a competitive edge in
job
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the job
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 market. Today, a wide variety of subjects have been inducted into
school’s
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the school’s
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 curriculum,
such
 as: Psy-chology、Accounting、Science Technology and so forth, which can
ex-tremely
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extremely
 expand
student’s
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students’
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 academic skills. After graduating,
university
 students are easier to attain a
job
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prestigious
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 business company. Without a desirable
job
, the knowledge and skills that they
learnt
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in
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 campus would not be exerted.
This
 may cause
the
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 reduction of
interests
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 in
academic
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academics
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 and
lose
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the
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 sense of achievement.
Hence
, laying emphasis on how to get a better
job
 is of vital significance.
On the other hand
, there are more advantages that students can benefit from
university
.
To begin
 with, they can improve the ability of
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individual
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in-dividual
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 development. Attending activities in college would be a prime opportunity to boost their communication skills and creative imagination.
for example
 :debate competition、artificial intelligent robot contest.
In addition
, from the perspective of society,
university
education
also
 helps students to develop higher moral standard,
this
 is because they can learn politics and law.
Therefore
, in the future, it is not difficult to imagine our society will be consisted of more polite and knowledgeable people. To some degree, it will be likely to alleviate crime rate. In conclusion, I accept that to get a better
job
 is the priority from
university
education
, yet the potential benefits should be highlighted.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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