Consumers are faced with increasing numbers of advertisements from competing companies. To what extent do you think consumers are influenced by advertisements? What measures can be taken to protect them?

Nowadays, in our society consumers are more likely to
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in touch with advertisements. Many
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customers are tend to buy anything they see on
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. As far as we observe, companies put more effort into their
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and try to lead consumers to action.
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, some
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adds
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of their's might be tricky and lawgivers should start to add new regulations to media. Currently, today's modern world is more about
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and
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. For that reason, we are more likely to come across
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any type of advertisement. Evidently, a huge part of our society is influenced by the
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and purchase what they see on TV. To be more specific, people are more into products that pretty women wear or handsome men hold in their
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. More importantly, whenever individuals have the products, they come up to a conclusion that
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they
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become one of those handsome men or beautiful women. Clearly, the desire of wanting to be what is shown on the
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leads individuals to consume more. Certainly, lawmakers and governments should take action in controlling the commercials. The main reason for
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adds
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are most likely to capture the intension of customers and
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of what is displayed is a hoax. There is no denying that
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Redbull does not make people
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actually fly. Governments should warn or even charge these kinds of
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. Authorities should
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warn them if not, they should charge them with
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fines or even may close their firms. In conclusion, in our civilized world, we
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to see more adverts.
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, many of us totally believe what is displayed on billboards because of them being really distractive.
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our centralised authorities should begin to add restrictions and limitations into the sector.
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