Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

There is
such
a big discussion in the
society
, about whether if it is okay to display every scientific
knowledge
and research. Some agree that every information should be equally shared, somehow many
individuals
believe that it may danger interests of countries and humanity. I hardly believe
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that most of the researches should be publicly announced,
further
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there are few that should not be known by
society
. People which asks for every academic study to be freely
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spread
spreaded
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, mostly have positive intentions,
to
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every situation. They believe that any study should be found on the internet for free of charge and anyone may be able to examine it.
Moreover
, these
individuals
agree that technology and
knowledge
will spread faster
due to
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it
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can be found anywhere on
web
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the web
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. These
individuals
commonly think that
knowledge
is our humanitarian value and
it
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can not be hidden from the universe.
Individuals
which wants not every research to be published, agree that it may
cause
danger against
society
or it may put businesses in danger.
Furthermore
, for
them
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some information about space and nuclear projects may alert nations and may
cause
disorder in societies. With no
doubt
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some
of
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CEO's do not want researches to be released in case not to lose
value
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of their companies and they do not want their techniques to be learnt. In my opinion, both sides have
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parts. I come up to
a
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conclusion that most of the
knowledge
should be open to
public
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the public
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except ones that can
cause
threat
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against humanity in case if it gets into evil hands
such
as, military technologies and
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databases
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data bases
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of countries. In conclusion, some people demand information to be
totally
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of charge and open to
public
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the public
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. Somehow many do believe that there are
informations
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information
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that can not be posted publicly because it may
cause
disorder in
society
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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